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The old man sits with stooped back.
The room is cold, just like his hands.
Thoughts have wandered like small children.
He wonders if he will see home again.

Thoughts have wandered home again,
with stooped backs and cold hands.
The room sits with the old man.
Like small children, he wonders if he will see cold.

Back stooped with thoughts, he wanders.
Like a child the small room sits, wondering.
Home again is cold.
The old man will see with his hands.

Thoughts have wandered with stooped backs.
The cold hands sit with the old man.
He wonders if he will see like small children.
The room is home again.
A cubism poem!
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Given 2011-04-05
Dementia by ~fadedmannequin is "a cubism poem" about a point we may all reach someday. ( Featured by GwenavhyeurAnastasia )
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smita13 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2014
I like the interesting structure - first time I've ever seen something like this.
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AbbyMeyer Featured By Owner May 9, 2013
An incredible poem even without the clever structure! :)
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momo-madness Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012   Writer
this was beautifully intellectual. i thoroughly enjoyed every bit of it. xox
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JasmineU2 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2011
Beautiful </3
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IanTheDino Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
This is the most amasing poem ihave read in my life. Congrats on the DD. ISee why.
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Troubled-Water Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2011   Writer
I was not familiar with this type of writing before. It greatly surprised me, in a good way, of course!
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2-Minutes-BehindxX Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2011
AMAZING.
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jellymansid Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2011
goosebumps
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ValentinaScreama Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011
Fantastic! I've never heard of cubism poetry before, but it seems really interesting. Congrats on the DD, you certainly earned it :)
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NordicLynx Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really like how this is written. My grandfather has got Alzheimers, and it is impossible to understand what he is thinking about
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